Many people known Sidoarjo with Lumpur Lapindo disaster . But not many people known about the interesting thing in there . Sidoarjo is a small city which has developed for many years ago . Many Sidoarjo's residents become succes by working as executor of seafish . And they have produced a good quality of Bandeng fish . Most of this city income are become from there .
Sidoarjo is a small city but many interesting place that it has .Ones of the interesting place is a big field which located on the center of the city called as ' Alun-Alun Sidoarjo ' . In every Saturday evening the residents are filled-up this place . In there we can find many entertainment . We also can find many traditional entertainment which can not we see in a big city . Such as 'Andong' or dog-chart and 'Odong-odong' . You can rent 'Andong for take a round this place . Many food stalk un there and which has a good price and tasty food . Not only modern food but also traditional food from Java . Sidoarjo also has a traditional food like 'Lontong Kupang' and 'Kerupuk Udang' or shrimp crackers . Another important place in Sidoarjo is 'GOR' or kind of a big hall sport court . In 1998 there was taking 'National Olimpic Season' or called 'PON' . It's very big sport event in Indonesia . So this place is mostly important . People come here for jogging or do some exercises . For shopping Sidoarjo also has 'Tanggulangin' . Tanggulangin produce bag , shoes , jacket and case that made from leather . The price is reasonable with the quality . So many people when come to Surabaya always come in here to buy some souvenirs .
I like live in here because this city is not too crowd and busy like Surabaya .
your paragraph is good , i think the tenses has right,but your topic is too many , be creative to write your paragraph again ..
BalasHapusthe last, give me comment too.
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your story about your hometwown is good ..
BalasHapusThat's good writing, I think..
BalasHapusYou type it with your original language,,
But, there are still some mistakes ib your writing..
Ex:
- many interesting place (it should "interesting places", because it's plural)
-We also can..(It should "We can also..")
-Sidoarjo also has a traditional food..(It should "Sidoarjo has many traditional foods", because U type more than one of kind of foods,,Lontong Kupang and Krupuk Udang...)
I think,,that's all from my comment..
i think your paragraph is good
BalasHapusbut you tell many topic about your hometown
maybe you can describe specifically.
thank's for all your comment .
BalasHapusfor Rullyana i think i need studying about tenses with you . :)
because i lil bit able with structure .
your writing is great :)
BalasHapusbut as i see, you always forget to put 's' if you mention many ...
such as:
many entertainment(s)
many traditional entertainment(s)
many food stalk(s)
be more meticulous next time :)
your writing is great :)
BalasHapusbut as i see, you always forget to put 's' if you mention many ...
such as:
many entertainment(s)
many traditional entertainment(s)
many food stalk(s)
be more meticulous next time :)
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your paragraph is good.
BalasHapusand thank`s for your comment.